Thursday, September 6, 2012

The cat and the crow

I came across a Visual Dare over at Angela Goff's website Anonymous Legacy. I have no idea if there are hard and fast rules or not, but since there's no judging, I'm going to ignore the 100 word suggestion and post my 229 word story. I tried to keep it short, but I'm not really worried about the length. It was fun. Here's the pretty picture (ahem, I mean Visual Dare):

“You mean to tell me you can’t fly?!?!” I was incredulous.

“I didn’t know it wouldn’t come naturally once I changed form!” Marietta exclaimed. “Just let me ride on you.”

“No way! Here.” I took a swipe at her hoping to scare the instinct into her, but my claws caught on the wall behind her and she gave an indignant caw and did some sort of ungainly flapping hop away from me. No flying. Bummer.

“Are you quite finished trying to kill me?” She waddled back.

“Why don’t you just pick a different animal?”

“I can’t change now. I have to wait for this one to wear off first. Just crouch and I’ll hop on.”

That was easier said than done, “This is not going to be as fun as you promised!”

After much buffeting, she declared, “Your spine is much too skinny, lower your head for me.”

“You have got to be kidding me!”

“Just do it!”

I growled in response, which was actually a pretty awesome feeling as a cat. That vibration just echoes through your whole body. Very satisfying.

I sat up, trying to balance the absurdly heavy dead weight on top of my head. “This is not going to work. I can barely hold you up!”

“Oh stop complaining! Let’s go! To your right.”

I sighed. This was going to be a long 24 hours.


  1. Ha, this is great!! Would like to know what circumstances led up to their changing, and what they'll be up to for the next 24 hours. Great characterization through dialogue, nice sensory details.

    So glad you found the Visual Dare! We try to keep it to 100 words but - as you said - there's no judging, so we don't tattle if you go a smidge over. Sometimes the story takes over on it's own.

    Lovely work! Looking forward to more from you in future Visual Dares!

    1. Thanks, Angela! The facial expression on the cat really inspired this story. His face made me laugh out loud! I'll definitely check out the pictures for Visual Dare in the future (and try to keep it to 100 words if I can)! :)

  2. This made me smile. I love their squabbling, and you did a great job creating the image of flightless Marietta trying to hop onto the cat's back. Really nicely done. I'm looking forward to reading more of your writing!

  3. Great idea for this one! I can just imagine the conversation in 24 hours...

    1. Hehehehe! Right?! Thanks! I feel like that makes for a successful flash fiction piece!